HEY LET'S JUST DELVE RIGHT INTO THIS POST AND FORGET I TOOK A SUPER LONG BREAK FROM BLOGGING OKAY? OKAY. PLZ DON'T KILL ME.
Since I took a haitus that was only semi-planned (meaning I knew I wouldn't post AS much due to my sister's wedding but then haha yeah didn't even after all that craziness subsided) I will oblige you all by sharing snippets of a story I haven't worked on in ages.
It IS finished, but YAH NEEDS A LOT OF EDITING (send HALP PLZ*)
I plan on editing this like crazy in the semi-near future, or enlisting some help THEN I MAY OR MAY NOT BE ON THE LOOKOUT FOR BETA READERS YOU KNOW WHAT I'M SAYING??
*why is it so much fun to write plz??????
So I'm going to be starting a new blog soon dedicated solely to my Adventure Entries so when that comes up I will share the link with you and expect you all to be good little children and subscribe to that one too!!
However, I am going to put a whole bunch of entries on there until I am completely caught up to the day I am living in and THEN I will make the blog public so I am sorry if it is a lot to catch up on, but I may end up putting it in a book and publishing it anyway SO THERE YA GO.
Here be the snippets:
The beginning few sentences:
Chopin floats gently out of the speakers as Phillip and I do the dishes. I wash, as a rule. He is too slow, and never uses enough soap. He dries, as a rule. I can't stand drying with a wet towel, and the towel never stays dry for long. Neither of us speak, and neither of us care. We love to listen to the rippling of the piano roll around the room, and are content to work in silence. As I drain my sink, and rinse the extra suds away, he puts the last dish in the cupboard. I fold the rag and drape it on its hook. He spreads his towel over the oven door handle. I sweep the floor, and he vacuums the living room.
Enter: Trouble, right stage.
¨Class, we have a new student amongst us! Please do your best to welcome him!¨ Mrs. Latimer says in her false cheerful voice- the one she only uses for adults, and welcoming new students. A boy with shockingly blond hair stands up. His eyes are a kind of brown auburn color I have never seen before.
'Sup, loser.
¨Hey! You!¨
I freeze.
¨ Yes you!¨ I turn around and see the New Kid, but he’s not talking to me. He is talking to a tall handsome guy a few feet away from me. New Kid is tiny compared to him, but he walks over and pokes Tall Guy in the chest.
“I saw you trip her!” he yells, pointing at me. My eyes widen. “You got a problem with her?”
Tall Guy smirks,“No, but I got a problem with you poking me.” he says, causing a lot of laughter. I am amazed that New Kid would stand up for me. Maybe he isn’t so bad. But then New Kid just lifts his hands in surrender and gives a nervous chuckle
“Just wondering.” he says, and backs off. Never mind.Because I wanted to see what it would be like to enjoy math:
(pro tip: it's terrible 0.5/10 do not recommend)
I am in need of some math and chocolate to restore me to my senses. There is a bag of chocolate chips in the cupboard, so I take the whole thing, a spoon and the tub of peanut butter.
5y - 7y + 6y - 9 = 3 + 2y is… I ask myself. Phillip usually makes the meals because he was the only one who really knew how. Okay, combine terms… Now, I know enough to scrape a meal together, but still not much. Add 9, subtract… divide... I’ll have to ask Philip to teach me some more about meals. I get out the chicken, and put it in the oven like it says in the directions. I follow the recipe for everything on the label of the alfredo sauce. I love it when labels have recipes. It makes it so much easier. “Aha!” I yell out loud, “It's 6!” I check my answer quickly and then grin.
Math is so calming.
Because that's what older brothers are for:
Before Mom´s sickness, Phillip and I were basically strangers. We only spoke to each other when we were fighting, and never went into each other's rooms. I positively disliked him. Then, on the day of the funeral, Dad got mad and yelled at me for being too loud. I was barely making any noise at all. I started crying, and so Phillip came out of Mom’s room, took me gently by the shoulders and walked me to my room. We stayed up there and played Barbie dolls till supper time. I smile at the thought, because I had grown out of my Barbies a long time ago, but it was the only thing Phillip thought girls played with. We played more often after that. H always made the girls run away, and stop the Nazi Ken dolls from destroying the planet. They would try, anyway. They never won. The Nazis always caught them in the end and shot them.
She's the paramedic:
“Hello Mabel. I hoped you would come.” Phillip says from the doorway. Without turning around the woman barks a little laugh and says.
“Hiya, Squirt.” Then she does turn and then tilts her head in Paige's direction. “You should have told me you had a girlfriend, baby.” She says.
“Well I didn't want you to be jealous. That could prove hazardous for everyone's health.” He smiles back.
Paige looks confused, but I smile and Mabel throws her head back and roars with laughter.
After a minute or so, she sobers up and then jerks her thumb at me.
“What's the story with the kid?”
poetry:
White paper
Blue ink
Icy vapor
Upon the brink.
...
My brother, My friend
My mother No longer
My father A stranger
And me.
Enter Polly Parrot:
¨Polly, this is Beatrix. Beatrix, Polly.¨ I smile back at her.
“Hi.” I say
“Hi!” she says. I can easily tell they are sisters. They both have wavy blond hair, and bright blue eyes. They both have that dimple in their chin when they talk. And they both talk. Non. Stop. They are really nice, and Polly has a very good sense of style, but by the time we get out to get our nails done, my ears are ringing.
“Have you never seen the Idiot’s Lantern?” I ask her. “That is the episode this costume is from!”
“I don’t really like the tenth Doctor.” she says. I stare at her. “What?” she demands haughtily “I can have an opinion can’t I?” I frown. That is what Jonas said. I shrug and nod at her.
“I suppose. Now put my nail polish away will you?” she does so, and then pushes my TARDIS noise a couple of times. That girl.
Also, minor note here, I had my SECOND BLOGOVERSARY on October 12 (i think????) and I MISSED IT!!! I feel terrible!!!
But I also don't have anything to celebrate with so THERE'S THAT.
Here's a quick interrogation- I mean SURVEY! Ha ha. Survey.
DO IT NOW!
lol jk u don't have 2
But Do It.
AND THAT'S ALL!!! sorry this post was one of the old Dump Everything on You and Then RUN, but I mean you guys survived it before I turned sane (<< this was a joke. ew. why would I EVER be sane?!) so yah you can bear it again.
kayloveyoubyeeeeeeee
ALL RIGHT ALL RIGHT WHERE DO I SIGN UP TO BE A BETA READER OR EDITOR OR WHATEVER BECAUSE THE SOONER I READ THE REST OF THIS STORY THE SOONER I CAN ACTUALLY LIVE LIFE AGAIN
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Y'KNOW
it'd be nice maybe????
BUT SERIOUSLY IT WAS SO GOOD
Also
If my commenting style is crazier and capital-letter-er than usual, IT'S YOUR FAULT WITH THAT SURVEY OF YOURS OKAY
Also I was really tempted to answer some of the less-nice answers simply because they were so dreadfully amusing. But I didn't, never fear. :D
ANYWAY DEAR THANKS FOR RUINING MY LIFE BY ONLY GIVING ME SNIPPETS I MUST HAVE THE WHOLE THING
((Just kidding, kind of, not really))
((Except my life isn't exactly entirely ruined, don't worry.))
Oh don't worry, you are already signed up. That comes with putting up with my comments and emails and blog posts for so long I'LL LET YOU KNOW.
DeleteYAASSSS!!!! my goal is fulfilled!!!!!! I got Rae to be loud and scream over me in the comments!!!!!!!! (wow I'm amazing)
I know!! I really wanted to answer them too!! I actually went through and clicked "my name is Other" and entered it just so I could make sure it worked.
It did.
And it was fun.
and someone else needs to do it too!! (hint hint)
As long as I knew it was you, I wouldn't have minded your choosing the rude ones, though I might have been like "I think you're joking, but just to make sure..." ya know. Because I'm insecure like that and need everyone to LOVE me.
HAHA!! You are ENTIRELY welcome, my dear!! Anytime at all.
Honestly I was so scared they would make my book seem cliche and terrible and I know it is a fluffy contemporary story but still.
I'LL LET YOU READ IT SOON, I PROMISE.
by the way, I wasn't sure but I was pretty positive it was your answers in the survey, so THANK YOU FOR COMMENTING LETTING ME KNOW!
that last answer though. so cryptic.
<333
OH GOOD. Can't wait to read it.
DeleteAlso. I tagged you for "The Book Lovers Tag". So here's the link if you feel like doing it.
http://raesdropofgoldensun.blogspot.com/2017/11/the-book-lover-tag.html
:)
thanks dear!!! I'll be sure to do it... sometime..... I hope.... I have like a million other tags I still need to do.... BUT I WILL
DeleteI always have fun on your blog! I love those snippets. The very first one I can relate to. I can't stand to dry wet dishes. Your writing is wonderful. If you need a betta reader in the near future let me know! (: Have a great week!
ReplyDeleteAww!! Thanks darling!!! YES. I KNOW.
DeleteThank you!!!!! I WILL LET YOU KNOW AS SOON AS I HAVE SOMETHING READY!!!!!!
You're the best!!
also.
um.
you're a Lunartic?
um.
*incoherent fangirl gibberish*
WOW! I AM JUST. WOW.
WE MUST DISCUSS THIS AT LENGTH.
WHO IS YOUR FAVOURITE CHARACTER, WHICH IS YOUR FAVOURITE BOOK, WHO IS YOUR FAVOURITE COUPLE, CAN YOU REMEMBER A FAVOURITE SCENE, OR A FAVOURITE QUOTE OR LIKE WOW. I CAN'T even.
Happy blogoversary!! :)
ReplyDeleteTHANK YOU!!!!!! <3
DeleteOmg I absolutely loved the snippets! They were great, and really intriguing! Can't wait to read the whole book XD
ReplyDeleteI took your survey btw ;) I'm glad I gave you the idea lol
Thanks, dear!! YAY I CAN'T WAIT TO SHARE IT WITH YOU!!!
Deleteand thank you for the idea of the survey, and filling it out!! I heartily enjoyed your responses!
(lol, I doubt you'll need to pull out that evidence though, I tend to do that to everyone else... LET'S JUST HOPE I NEVER GET ARRESTED FOR BEING TOO LOUD ON THE INTERNET BECAUSE THERE WOULD BE A WHOLE LOT OF EVIDENCE. *realizes I just put more evidence on my own blog* ... OH WELL!!! *THROWS CONFETTI* )
THank you for stOPPing by and doing all the things and commenting and all the things that- okay I'm going to stop now
That's okay! I'm glad you enjoyed my responses! XD
DeleteI'm laughing so much right now; Police officer: "I'm arresting you on suspicion of being too loud on the internet" XD Why do I find that so funny??
You're welcome!! :D
LOL I'M GLAD YOU FIND ME AS AMUSING AS I DO.
Delete;D
I AM TOTALLY DISTRACTED BY THAT PRETTY HEADER ESTHERRR.
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OKAY BUT THAT STORY. eeee i need more!! loved those beginning few sentences. it would pretty awesome to beta read this thing ya know :) <3
and eww i agree 100% about math.
can't wait for the second blog!! what a great idea!
sophy of sophyslighthouse.blogspot.com
THANK YOU!!!! I never even said but it's sort of the aesthetic for my book (who's snippets you read)
DeleteYAY I'M SO GLAD!!!! I gotta get to work on editing so you all can read it already!!
Thanks!! I'm working on the theme right now!
Thanks for commenting and for filling out the survey!!
I was already planning to do Brother SO YAH GOTCHA COVERED.
OKAY. SO THE STORY YOU TOLD ABOUT BEA? AGH MY HEART!!!
ARE YOU TRYING TO KILL ME?!?!?!?!?! I need to meet her so bad so I can be friends with her and make her laugh and hold her and ASDFGHSKWOKL.
YOU ARE CRUEL. SO CRUEL.
<333
LOVE THE SNIPPETS E! Honestly, my favorite is the first one, because it's just so picturesque. But I also LOVE the last one I think? The one about Phillip. Maybe it's not the last, but I like that one, too. ;)
ReplyDeleteIt's been so much fun spending time writing and plotting with you... But the most fun comes when we're SUPPOSED to be doing that boring creative stuff, and NOT and instead talking about... honestly, I have NO CLUE what we talk about?!??!?!?!?!?
Anyway, you're just the best, and I can't wait to talk more, E.
With love, Allie ;)
I like that one too!! It was SOOO hard to choose snippets that didn't give away anything but also gave you guys a feel of what the story is actually like, y'know?
DeleteAh yes! The last two are pretty awesome. Actually, I don't know if you've ever read that part the last one is from, because I'd been adding in scenes to fill in the plot holes so.. yeah!! I need to finish so you can read it again!!!
I KNOW!!!! It's been amazing. Well at least we get to talk and have fun and the writing will come when it comes. I KNOW!! Whenever mom asks me what I talk about with my friends I'm like "Uhhhhhhhhhhhh... anything and everything under the sun. Plus some things under Mars and Jupiter because WHYEVER NOT I ASK YOU"
I can't wait either, dearest!!
love ya, sister dear,
~E
That first snippet! <3 It's really nice to read about siblings doing housework in comfortable silence - which sounds odd when I say it, so I'm blaming the spell your words weave. ;)
ReplyDeleteAnd I meant to comment before you, after that thing on Jazzy's blog... but I got distracted reading a few of your posts. And then listening to your AMAZING voice on YouTube. (I love singing and listening to music, and you singing is just- it's gORGEOUS.) So you got to my blog before I got to yours. (Not that it matters?? because we're both here now anyway!)
- (SLR) :P
I know!!! (um... guys... she just said my words weave a spell. GUYS GUYS GUYS LOOK I HAVE PROOF SHE IS SO AMAZING SHE LIKES MY WRITING GUYS GUYS GUYS THIS IS A GOOD DAY) but seriously, THANKS GIRL that is so sweet of you!
DeleteMUAHAHAHAHAHAAHAAA!!!!!! I commented first, I commented first! (in singsongy voice)
oh but y'all she's complimenting me again GIRL STAAAHP! (but also, you can keep going because it's helping my self esteem HELLO)
*incoherent excited noises* dANG GIRL YOU WENT AND READ MY PAST POSTS AND WATCHED MY VIDEOS JUST WOW YOU ARE MAKING ME FEEL BAD FOR ONLY COMMENTING ON ONE OF YOUR POSTS!!! (I shall go and catch up on your blog in like.... two hours-er, seconds. Thanks, Time, you're a pal.)
I HAVE A FEELING WE ARE GOING TO BE GOOD FRIENDS, MY DEAR SLR. VERY GOOD FRIENDS.
I mean, SNARK and CRAZY, and FANDOMS?? this is going to be fantastic.
(BTW, who is your favourite Doctor, companion, season and episode IF YOU CAN ANSWER THAT I KNOW HOW HARD IT IS SO IT'S OKAY YOU CAN YELL AT ME FOR BEING CRUEL BEFORE YOU ANSWER THEM ALL. I will answer after you so I can make this comment a teeeny bit shorter haha)
I just like to semi-stalk people xD (Seriously, do more songs, please?? and I can't believe you wrote those two yourself!!)
DeletePUT IN A GOOD WORD WITH TIME FOR ME PLEASE??? I think he has something against me...
OKAY long story time!! *rubs hands together* I got into Who through the fandom side of Pinterest (same as Middle Earth, Sherlock, Marvel, Flash, etc...) (Pinterest was supposed to be a writing tool, but it turned out a lot of fellow teen writers were also fangirls, who would have guessed??) Anyway, I started with Day of the Doctor (followed by Time of the Doctor). *gasps of horror all round* Then I watched all of Eleven, then Nine, then Ten (and the first season of Twelve, but I wasn't as attached to him and haven't finished??). So my favourite Doctor is Eleven; favourite companion is probably Amy?? because she was my first companion (Rory is cool too... and Arthur Darvill later became a Time Master xD). River Song isn't a companion, in my mind [define companion?] so the others don't have to compete with her awesomeness, thankfully!! Season and episode... probably season 5? and I REALLY enjoyed Let's Kill Hitler, as well as basically any episode from the River-Song-in-a-space-suit-killing-the-Doctor/finding-baby-Melody arc.
*attempts to contain the unleashed fangirl* *manages to contain her enough to pretend everything's normal* Sooo. Your favourites, new friend?
hahaha don't worry I do too. (OKAY I WILL!!! I'm going to be doing a cover of In My Little Corner next and then who knows??? thanks!! I'm so glad you enjoyed them!)
DeleteOF COURSE!! I'll try anyway. We are on good terms now but he is very prone to mood swings.
YASS I LOVE LONG STORIES *bites finger in anticipation* LOLZ PINTEREST!!! that's hilarious. Okay yeah I LOVE ELEVEN TOO!! However, 9 was my first Doctor and he remains my favourite to this day followed CLOSELY by 3, 8, 10, and 12. Of course I love ALL the Doctors and 11 is very dear to my heart as well.
I LOVE AMY TOO, but I didn't really like her until Rory was travelling with them. Rory and Amy together make a great team with the Doctor.
Hmmm.. while I do call River a "companion" I also call that one guy Adam from season 1 (of the reboot stuff, so 9th doctor) a companion because he traveled with the Doctor. I guess when I say companion I mean anyone who had a major part in any one episode. Except Sally Sparrow. I mean, she was the companion that never was I think. I WISH she had been a companion!! I loved her. But yeah.
So RIVER YES I LOVE RIVER!! She is brilliant.
I also think I either like Donna, River or Bill the best. I LOVE Rose, and Martha was slightly annoying, I cannot stand Clara, though I wish I could because she had SO much potential to be great and just fell flat.
LOL don't worry, my Doctor Who watching was also wibbly-wobbly, timey-wimey.
I watched the first episode of season one (it is called Rose) and I think the third episode of season one, then I watched a few episodes of season 2, then some of 3 then the rest of 1, then some of 4 then the rest of 3 then and four, then 5, then 6, then the rest of 2, then all the rest in order.
I think.
I guess part of the whole initiation experience is watching them all out of order?? I MEAN IT'S A TIME TRAVELLING SHOW SO I GUESS IT MAKES SENSE.
AWW YES I LOVE THAT WHOLE RIVER THING IN SEASON FIVE AND SEASON SIX JUST PERFECTION STEPHEN MOFFAT AT HIS FINEST. I love those, but I also am heartily enjoying season 10 right now.
Favourite episode is FREAKING HARD TO DECIDE especially since my favourites are usually two parters! Such as, The Empty Child/The Doctor Dances, Silence in the Library/Forest of the Dead, The Zygon Invasion/The Zygon Inversion, etc., etc.
Also Blink was a brilliant episode! The Weeping Angels tho. SO. DANG. COOL.
*also tries to contain the fangirl but fails miserably* *LAUGHS MANICALLY*
yikes, how did you get so good at keeping in your fangirl?? Mine is always showing.
Haha, I'm just a baby fangirl, really! (Geekling, I call it) Haven't seen any "classic Who" - because once I calculated how long it would take to catch up on the ENTIRE THING, and I'm pretty sure I calculated wrong? because my answer was "a year, as long as that's all you ever did, like, for six hours a day". And that can't be right. Surely??
DeleteNine is awesome!! And if you're calling River a companion... that means she's probably my favourite companion?? WHY DID YOU ASK FOR "FAVOURITE". CHARACTERS COME IN SETS. Like Eleven + Amy + Rory is good (bonus points if you add in Rory's dad) (Amy did sort of need Rory to balance her out) (and then he died. over. and over.). Nine + Rose is good. Ten + Rose. Donna - well, she's pretty cool xD Eleven + River is good! (but because I watched the seasons in the wrong order, the last I saw of River was Silence in The Library?? and that hurt) OH AND DOES STRAX COUNT AS A COMPANION because he's hilarious.
YES TO THOSE EPISODE PAIRS
THE WEEPING ANGELS NOOO. Those were creepy. SO CREEPY. And when Amy and Rory - *weeps* Which bad guys did you find scariest? I think... the Silence was pretty scary (plus that was with the whole River/Melody thing)
Non-fangirl family... I'm well trained xD
AW I LOVE YOUR HEADER. AND THOSE SNIPPETS. loving it :D
ReplyDelete~ noor / bookmarkd
p.s - i just found your blog and i love it so far <33
THANKS!!! You're a dear!
Delete(I will be sure to check out your blog immediately!)
I have to comment, because that survey was hilarious. I'm sorry I didn't give you any useful information. But thanks for making me smile. :)
ReplyDeleteHahaha I loved your answers! I was really hoping for someone to go through and do My name is Other so THANKS!!!!!!
DeleteAww you're welcome!! I'm so glad you liked it.
thanks for stopping by and commenting!!!